Comment on TLoS: VfUtS, Ch. 1, part 2 by HolyCross9
Very good. I hope your getting permission to use Kindle and Skye.
Also, two things, Crabs are omnivorus, according to wiki, they feed primarialy on algae but will also take just about anything they can get including seaweed, mollusks, and small fish so that might help with the story a bit.
and two, you might want to edit it bacause in one part you accidentially called sebastian a crap, not crab.
Other than that, it's exellent so far. and the way you have Spyro and Cyn talk to each other, if you can talk like that impromtu you'll have more succesful relationships. from my experiance women really do like being complimented like that, but in private.
Also, two things, Crabs are omnivorus, according to wiki, they feed primarialy on algae but will also take just about anything they can get including seaweed, mollusks, and small fish so that might help with the story a bit.
and two, you might want to edit it bacause in one part you accidentially called sebastian a crap, not crab.
Other than that, it's exellent so far. and the way you have Spyro and Cyn talk to each other, if you can talk like that impromtu you'll have more succesful relationships. from my experiance women really do like being complimented like that, but in private.
Do not worry, for I have previously asked and have been approved by their respective owners to use them. And if you remember, Sebastian, although he's a crab, he also has the mouth and teeth of a human, but I'll ensure to keep this in mind while progressing with the story
. And I hope this part isn't reported because I used the word "eros," which I felt was the perfect kind of love described here for both Spyro and Cynder.
. And I hope this part isn't reported because I used the word "eros," which I felt was the perfect kind of love described here for both Spyro and Cynder.alright.