In Libraries, Books are, if I am not very much mistaken, generally classified according to what the Publisher says they are; Publishers are not, however, infallible, and the Convention you claim, by whomever it may be used, is still based in Error. It does not matter who calls it 'Poetry', the simple Facts are that you have a Piece of Prose which has the various Elements which unambiguously make up a Work of Fiction, and, as it is Prose, and as it is Fiction, it is therefore Prose Fiction. To call it anything else is inadmissibly illogical.
Consulting the Oxford English Dictionary, and leaving out Definitions which are any of recursive, obsolete, or figurative, as none of these are at this Moment relevant, Poetry is 'Composition in verse or some comparable patterned arrangement of language in which the expression of feelings and ideas is given intensity by the use of distinctive style and rhythm; the art of such a composition' and, further down, 'The product of this art as a form of literature; the writings of a poet or poets; poems collectively or generally.' What you have written is neither of the above, and the further Definitions given in the Entry are all extended or figurative, or else Compounds. This is what Poetry is, as a Square is a Shape with four equal Sides and four equivalent Angles. You may draw a Circle and call it a Square, but it will remain a Square, and you are either mistaken, or else simply lying, and would be called out for it, as you are now.
As for your Intentions, they seem to fail when met with somebody who has a reasonable Degree of Intelligence and an Understanding of the Workings of Poetry and Language: what is here presented is a Collection of possibly-interesting Ideas with which nothing meaningful has been done, rather like exhibiting Cans of open Paint -- a Material rather than an artistic Product -- in an Art Museum.
Attempting to Invoke Language in a more 'primordial' State is linguistically-unsound, though by 'primordial' you appear to mean 'infantile' (please be clear about what you mean, Malapropisms can make Matters confusing and lead to Misunderstanding): though Grammars may become simpler or more complex through natural Evolution, their Grammars always have their own internal Rules and Logic, and have as long as Language has been attested, and likely for some Time before.
What you are attempting to do in distorting a Word out of its natural Meaning is what most People contemptuously call 'Lying', and is a Thing that, when they see it, they tend to resent. People have been fancying unrhythmical or even nonsensical Works as Poetry for some Time, I am aware, but this does not mean they are; sometimes the Works in Question are excellent Pieces of Writing christened under the wrong Name, while others, like this Piece in Question, are Drivel which are meant to sound Profound while having slightly less-depth than an evaporated Puddle. Look very hard at the positive Comments you have received — many imply liking it because they imagine this out of their Depth, or else have been infected with ridiculous Fancies about what Poetry is.