gokuschichi4818's avatar
Yes.I have the picture on my computer,but I'm afraid to upload it because I don't own the rights to the photo.
MoonwalkingHorse's avatar
If you're uploading it for purposes of critique(which you are) it falls under the fair-use law so it's ok.....
wiat hold on, I probably have that photo, let me see if I can find it real quick
gokuschichi4818's avatar
ok. I'm waiting...:)
MoonwalkingHorse's avatar
I found it! but alas the website it's from no longer exists....but the point is I can give you a critique now :dummy:
And soooo lets seeeeeee.
The one real thing that bothers me is the fact that he is pretty much floating lol! Probably would have been a good idea to draw the ground line and to give that thing he’s sittng on(what is he sitting on?) so more depth so he’s not floating.
You’re running into a common problem a lot of people have. Foreshortening vs What your brain knows is there. (Foreshortening doesn’t make sense to the brain so you have to trick your brain)In the picture, MJ is sitting more at an angle but you drew him at a more forward angle(not necessarily a bad thing though). I guess you could say that your brain wants to draw what it knows is there and thus you drew a more forward angle. But like I said, tis not necessarily a bad thing with this drawing. I wouldn’t have noticed it if I didn’t see the ref.
Ummmmmmm…hmmmmmm, some proportions of his body are off because of your brain fighting foreshortening.(Your brain is saying “This doesn’t make sense woman!” *makes you draw entire arm*) You can see what I mean by brain vs foreshortening by looking at the length of his left/our right forearm. You drew it from a front view but in the photo it is slightly foreshortened.
I see that you’re also running into another common problem, being afraid of going too dark. Ok yea, MJ is hella pale, but he should still be darker than his white shirt :nod:
Face proportions are pretty spot on lest for the foreshortening thing.
(I hope I don’t sound mean, I always sound mean when I critique :iconscaredplz: But hey, it’s hard to improve when no one tells you what to work on)
But other than the foreshortening stuff and the shading stuff, tis allll gooood. I mean, I could tell what photo you referenced from. Kudos for that. You got face proportions down, mad props for that :nod: You’ve captured the original vibe of the photo too :nod: Tis a lovely drawing. I like it :iconmjnodplz:

holy ship I wrote an essay O_O
gokuschichi4818's avatar
I don't mind that you wrote an essay. The more help I can get,the better. I swear that foreshortening will be the end of me. How do I practice it? I was using a .07 mechanical pencil. Should I use something else? Would that help me go darker? I think some of the lead rubbed off too,since I had to pull it from under my fluffy cat. She wouldn't let me upload it. How do I make sure I'm drawing at a proper angle? I just feel so nervous when I upload;I guess I'm afraid that no one will like it and that it's been fail for the start. Thank you so much for helping me. You are so inspiring, and I just admire your work so much.
MoonwalkingHorse's avatar
How to practice foreshortening.....hmmmm....try to ignore the fact that you are drawing a face(or whatever it may be) and try to just draw angles and shades...so basically "forget" what you're drawing and just draw.
To go darker you should use a wooden pencil, mechanical pencils are too sharp/thin to get the job done. Orrrrrr if you have actual drawing pencils, your 3b pencil should be your best friend(I know mine is lol!)
hahahahahha evil cat!
How to draw at the proper angle....same thing as w/ foreshortening, forget what you're drawing
Awww don't be afraid,everybody has different tastes so even if you don't like it, someone will :nod: And plus, we all got to start somewhere!
Whaaaaaat?!:iconspazattackplz: I'm an inspiration!? :iconrlytearplz: