Comment on Galatea by Dyemelikeasunset
No that makes a lot of sense, thank you so much!
I know rhythm is what I struggle with the most, and I guess I got a little caught up in the alliterations in this piece that I lost track of it completely.
I know rhythm is what I struggle with the most, and I guess I got a little caught up in the alliterations in this piece that I lost track of it completely.
I'll definitely keep that in mind, and maybe even revisit this piece in the future.
As a question, do you always suggest doing "down > up > down > up" beat patterns, or was it because of the general flow of the rest of my piece?
I really appreciate the time you took to help me out, means a lot 
Rhythm is definitely part of the "revision" process for sure. You have to slow down and think, but it's okay if you don't want to. :-P
As for the rhythm, that is what I noticed with yours so I focused on making the other parts fit that. Incidentally, it is the most common form in speech and in poetry... however here is a link to the other forms (it's really short, won't take up much time at all). www.writing.upenn.edu/~afilrei… If you want a challenge, you should try writing in all five forms.
As an aside, I think your attitude is absolutely darling and you have gained a new watcher.
Ahh, thanks for the link! I think I will try to challenge myself to using these sometime
Also, glad to gain a watcher! 