Comment on RWBY OC Bio Template by a-flyer
I really like this character. He's sorta like mine but not vengeful and doesn't have a spirt in him. I really do think this is a good oc, great job.
Thanks Nitima, I read your character bio and I like it as well 
To be honest, there's a lot more to Nova than the bio reveals, but in order to prevent spoilers I will only say that my Fanfic reveals his memories. I can create a new, "Up-to-date" bio, but I think it would ruin part of the story. Perhaps when I am finished I may create a complete bio.
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To be honest, there's a lot more to Nova than the bio reveals, but in order to prevent spoilers I will only say that my Fanfic reveals his memories. I can create a new, "Up-to-date" bio, but I think it would ruin part of the story. Perhaps when I am finished I may create a complete bio.
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Yea I think I put too much into the bio but thanks for checking out my oc. I'm reading ur story I have to say I like it alot.
Quesrion: is there anything in your opinion that I should change in my oc
Quesrion: is there anything in your opinion that I should change in my oc
I think Abiel's Nightmare semblance is perfectly fine, except for working on Grimm. They are the embodiment of absolute evil and negativity, so I'm pretty sure that a 'Nightmare' would only make them stronger.
The only piece of advice I think you could use is that you should include some weaknesses and limitations your OC has. For example, you could have this "Spirit of Vengeance" actively trying to bring about his Reaper form and create as much chaos as possible. This would give the character a legitimate fear of his 'darker half', and give him a goal in learning how to either come to an agreement with the demon, or purge it entirely. On a second note: I would remove teleportation entirely and place it in favor of a 'become shadow' kind of ability, making him become intangible and able to go through walls like a ghost for a short time. Important to set extreme limits on things like this though!
Overall, a very good OC and it's been fun brainstorming!
Also, don't forget to give me any tips to my own character if you so desire, I'd like to hear your input!
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The only piece of advice I think you could use is that you should include some weaknesses and limitations your OC has. For example, you could have this "Spirit of Vengeance" actively trying to bring about his Reaper form and create as much chaos as possible. This would give the character a legitimate fear of his 'darker half', and give him a goal in learning how to either come to an agreement with the demon, or purge it entirely. On a second note: I would remove teleportation entirely and place it in favor of a 'become shadow' kind of ability, making him become intangible and able to go through walls like a ghost for a short time. Important to set extreme limits on things like this though!
Overall, a very good OC and it's been fun brainstorming!
Also, don't forget to give me any tips to my own character if you so desire, I'd like to hear your input!
*salute*