Comment on All my clean towels! by zarla
WARNING! Carry on reading! Or you will die, even if you only looked at the word warning!
Once there was a little girl called Clarissa, she was ten-years-old and she lived in a mental
hospital, because she killed her mom and her dad. She got so bad she went to kill all the
staff in the hospital so the More-government decided that best idea was to get rid of her so
they set up a special room to kill her, as humane as possible but it went wrong the
machine they were using went wrong. And she sat there in agony for hours until she died.
Now every week on the day of her death she returns to the person that reads this letter, on
a Monday night at 12:00 a.m. She creeps into your room and kills you slowly, by cutting you
and watching you bleed to death. Now send this to ten other pictures on this one site, and
she will haunt someone else who doesn't. This isn't fake. apparently, if you copy and paste
this to ten comments in the next ten minutes you will have the best day of your life tomorrow.You
will either get kissed or asked out, if you break this chain u will see a little dead girl in your room
Once there was a little girl called Clarissa, she was ten-years-old and she lived in a mental
hospital, because she killed her mom and her dad. She got so bad she went to kill all the
staff in the hospital so the More-government decided that best idea was to get rid of her so
they set up a special room to kill her, as humane as possible but it went wrong the
machine they were using went wrong. And she sat there in agony for hours until she died.
Now every week on the day of her death she returns to the person that reads this letter, on
a Monday night at 12:00 a.m. She creeps into your room and kills you slowly, by cutting you
and watching you bleed to death. Now send this to ten other pictures on this one site, and
she will haunt someone else who doesn't. This isn't fake. apparently, if you copy and paste
this to ten comments in the next ten minutes you will have the best day of your life tomorrow.You
will either get kissed or asked out, if you break this chain u will see a little dead girl in your room
Usually I tend to just skip over these chain comments when I see them, but I was bored so I decided to read it because why not, and I noticed a few flaws in the storytelling that I'd like to point out because why the heck not.
First of all, there are multiple mistakes with phrasing. They don't really have anything to do with the story itself, but things like that can really take the reader out of the story.
Secondly, how the heck did she manage to kill all of the staff of the mental hospital? For one thing, she's a little girl. I doubt that she'd have been able to overpower every single person working at the hospital. There's also the problem that people would have been able to see her trying to kill everyone. How did no one manage to restrain her, or at least escape and go get help before she had time to kill everyone?
What the heck is the "More-government"? This might just be me being dumb, but I don't think that that's a thing.
Why didn't they go into her death chamber and kill her manually instead of letting her suffer? In the story it's explicitly said they were trying to end her as humanely as possible, so I doubt that they'd just completely ignore that fact just because that one way that they were planning to kill her didn't work.
There's also the issue with the reward that someone will allegedly get by copying and pasting this. What exactly makes a certain day the best day of one's life? It says that they'll either get asked out or kissed, but what if they're aromantic? Also, who would want to have a set in stone 'best day of their life'? If you held the knowledge that a certain day was the best day of your life, and that no other day that you could ever experience would ever be as good as that one, it'd probably get pretty depressing.
Finally, there's the fact that this is a chain letter. That's probably the biggest flaw.
Oh, also, since it's pretty rude to comment on something that someone posted without mentioning anything that has anything to do with that person or the thing that that person posted, can I just say that Zarla is both an incredible storyteller and artist, and that she, as well as everyone else on this website, should't have to deal with all of these idiotic chain comments?
First of all, there are multiple mistakes with phrasing. They don't really have anything to do with the story itself, but things like that can really take the reader out of the story.
Secondly, how the heck did she manage to kill all of the staff of the mental hospital? For one thing, she's a little girl. I doubt that she'd have been able to overpower every single person working at the hospital. There's also the problem that people would have been able to see her trying to kill everyone. How did no one manage to restrain her, or at least escape and go get help before she had time to kill everyone?
What the heck is the "More-government"? This might just be me being dumb, but I don't think that that's a thing.
Why didn't they go into her death chamber and kill her manually instead of letting her suffer? In the story it's explicitly said they were trying to end her as humanely as possible, so I doubt that they'd just completely ignore that fact just because that one way that they were planning to kill her didn't work.
There's also the issue with the reward that someone will allegedly get by copying and pasting this. What exactly makes a certain day the best day of one's life? It says that they'll either get asked out or kissed, but what if they're aromantic? Also, who would want to have a set in stone 'best day of their life'? If you held the knowledge that a certain day was the best day of your life, and that no other day that you could ever experience would ever be as good as that one, it'd probably get pretty depressing.
Finally, there's the fact that this is a chain letter. That's probably the biggest flaw.
Oh, also, since it's pretty rude to comment on something that someone posted without mentioning anything that has anything to do with that person or the thing that that person posted, can I just say that Zarla is both an incredible storyteller and artist, and that she, as well as everyone else on this website, should't have to deal with all of these idiotic chain comments?
I live with a ghost already. His name is Bob. He likes to mess with the lights. Dead peeps are pretty chill
what kind of chill the " cool kind one" or the "I`m gonna kill you"
Bob's the cool kind.
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Ok look. I saw this and the teddy one several times and all are fake. I stopped reading yours, and the teddy, and never copied. Nothing happened to me. I'm still alive. No bad fortune. No dead girls in my room(besides, i dont even sleep in there). So why wont anybody stop? I just joined and this is already a problem for me.
yeah, the spam is so annoying.