Comment on Experiment in Ink Wash: Algernon and Ishuram by Hestia-Edwards
I approve of the ghost figure. So I suppose Ishuram is the name of the ghost figure, and I read that you were planning to leave it's space white next time, so for that I'd suggest leaving faint shapes as you did this time, but even fainter, because otherwise it will be a floating white being instead of looking transparent. I'm not sure how you want it to be though, so do tell xD.
I love the background, but I think even the trees need a few smoother straight strokes, because the one above Ishuram seems like a lot of lines instead of a few straighter ones.
Making the bold outlines makes the drawing seem incomplete, because then I'm expecting shadows and more detail. The character also needs anatomy work, but also shadows would be a huge improvement. Algernon has his ear above the eye! The eyes look good though, and focused. Looking closer the outlines are a bit shakey, especially on the chest. The ghost figure on the other hand could use more shakiness instead of giving it a compact form. Unless that's how you prefer it to be.
In conclusion it's a good drawing considering you tried a new style, and the characters and the background fit well and create a good scene, it just needs more form and shadows.
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I love the background, but I think even the trees need a few smoother straight strokes, because the one above Ishuram seems like a lot of lines instead of a few straighter ones.
Making the bold outlines makes the drawing seem incomplete, because then I'm expecting shadows and more detail. The character also needs anatomy work, but also shadows would be a huge improvement. Algernon has his ear above the eye! The eyes look good though, and focused. Looking closer the outlines are a bit shakey, especially on the chest. The ghost figure on the other hand could use more shakiness instead of giving it a compact form. Unless that's how you prefer it to be.
In conclusion it's a good drawing considering you tried a new style, and the characters and the background fit well and create a good scene, it just needs more form and shadows.
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Hello! Thank you for the critique, and I apologize for the delay in response. It's been a weird week for me.
I confess I was thinking of making Ishuram just a solid white space, but it seems people do like to see a hint of something there. Perhaps I will go with the suggestion of making the shapes paler.
Ah yes, the ear above the eyes...An anime trait, I wager.
Anatomy will be a constant uphill push. I agree with the shaky lines: I am used to an instrument with applying pressure to the paper. Brushes take practice. I also agree with the shadows--they are lacking.
Thank you again.
I confess I was thinking of making Ishuram just a solid white space, but it seems people do like to see a hint of something there. Perhaps I will go with the suggestion of making the shapes paler.
Ah yes, the ear above the eyes...An anime trait, I wager.
Anatomy will be a constant uphill push. I agree with the shaky lines: I am used to an instrument with applying pressure to the paper. Brushes take practice. I also agree with the shadows--they are lacking. Thank you again.
good luck \owo/ I hope your next week goes well o:<